Picture this, at 8:00 A.M. in the morning, after late night party, you are dragged out of bed expected to walk around and flip on some bars with your hands for a WORLD WIDE CHAMPIONSHIP that you forgot about. One more thing to go with this, ever heard the term " If you fall of the horse, the only thing to do is get back on"? I would love it if you understood WHAT gets you back on the horse. I mean, if nothing did, the horse would stroll away leaving you behind. How? Presenting my independent narrative writing piece with only a few pinches of help! Just read on!
Connor
ReplyDeleteI barely could hear anything most of the time so I couldn't analyse much, please fix it.
Hey! Great movie! There were some ups and downs. So first, the good things you did:
ReplyDeleteI liked it how everyone in your group seemed to be working hard on this, and no one was left out. Another thing - I liked it how you acted out everything, You showed what it actually looked like.
But sadly, there were several bad things. Many of them were little, but two things that stood out was the small lack of editing and the voice level. About the editing: When you're acting, it's key that you edit the parts out where you get up and click to stop the camera. You want to make it look as natural as possible. For the voice level, it was somewhat annoying trying to strain to hear. But overall, I think that you did a pretty good job! Nice work.
The one that I would least likely use is Ignore Them.
ReplyDeleteThe one that I would most likely use is Confront Them.
I really liked your acting to make the viewer interested in the subject. Although throughout the video, I could barely hear what you guys were saying. Next time you guys need to speak up so that the audience can hear you. Other than that, your video was great!
ReplyDeleteI was especially impressed with how your evidence was so specific and it was easier to understand
ReplyDeleteYou might have improved by making it relate more to the audience because the things you said about gossip doesn't really fit me.
The strategy/tool I would most likely use is asking other people if the topic fits them because it would be irrelevant if it doesn't fit the audience.
The strategy/tool I would least likely use is talking off the notes because it makes the presentation boring if you do.
I really liked how most of your tips were very revelant and impactful.
ReplyDeleteYou could have been clearer, if you had spoken more loudly.
1. For a large part of the video, the voices were very soft and not very clear.
2. You could have recorded in a more quiter setting, since at times the background sounds were quiet loud.
3. You can't clearly understand what is taking place, until you read the short blurb that follows the story.
A strategy I really liked is #4, which is to confront the gossiper, since this is a great way to show that you are not scared and you are willing to stand against them.
A strategy I would least likely use, is #5, because I beleive that gossiping should not be done.
By Dhruv